Cloud Part 1: Cloud's Worst Day (Writer:IFluffyBooru)

A cyan earthie with an off-white mane awakes with a small yawn and looks around his safe room; this safe room has been his whole world for as long as he can remember, which is at least three forevers. He stumbles to his hooves and steps over to the litterbox, as it was time to make good-poopies. With sleepy-goo in his eyesies, he crouches down and makes a lot of watery poopies and lets out a long stream of pee-pees. Slowly as he drains himself, he realises something is wrong, his hooves are getting wet and the poopies smell so much worse than normal. Clearing his eyes of the sleepy-goo he finally takes a better look at his surroundings, and realises that while he is in a saferoom, it is not his saferoom …and he just made bad-poopies.

The stallion looks around the room and takes note of small changes: while his saferoom has blue walls, the walls in this room are white; there are no blockies to stack, no stuffy friends, and no FluffTV. In fact the only things in the room are himself, a red ball a bit smaller than him, a litterbox in the opposite corner, and the pile of bad-poopies he had just made. Feeling the bump-bumps in his chest start to speed up, and feeling his breathies getting stuck in his throat, the stallion begins to call out. “Daddeh, whewe awe 'ou Daddeh? Cwoud has scawies… Daddeh! Can Daddeh heaw Cwoud?” Waiting for a few moments in silence, Cloud perks his hear-places up, thinking he might hear something.

Slowly the saferoom door opens and in steps a strange human. They have a black mane, and see-helpers like his daddy has. They’re also wearing a long white not-fluff over their other not-fluffs. The human has a smile on their face as they walk in, but it is quickly replaced with a scary face. Following their gaze Cloud sees they are looking at his bad-poopies. “Now… Forty-Four this is not a good first impression, this is your first day here and you’ve already made bad-poopies,” the human says flatly, looking down at Cloud with a strange expression he can’t quite understand.

“Cwoud’s namsie id Cwoud! Namsie idn’t fowty-fow, an’ - an’ Cwoud no means to make bad-poopies; dah meanie wittewbocks wun away fwom Cwoud! Pwomise!,” the small pastel colored stallion defiantly shouts at the strange human. The human pinches their smell-place with their not-hooves and lets out a sharp breath before looking back down at Cloud.

“Okay, fair enough… you’re in a new place so this one time we can overlook the bad poopies,” says the human, putting heavy emphasis on the phrase one time. “Normally you would have to clean up your bad-poopies yourself, Forty-Four, but I’ll have someone come in and clean it up shortly.”

“Siwwy hoomin, fwuffies awen’t fow cweanin’ up poopies! Fwuffies am fow huggies, an’ wuv… an’ - an’… wotsa huggies! ‘Ou awe ah stoopie hoomin if ‘ou dunno dat-” a loud smack rings out as the human slams the wall with their not-hoof and stares at Cloud with scary see-places. Cloud lets out a scaredy fart, but no poopies come out since he already made poopies. After a few moments of uncomfortable silence he begins to speak again. “Fwuffy awweady say namsie id Cwoud… siwwy hoomin. Wiww siwwy hoomin bwing Cwoud to hid Daddeh?”

The human quietly speaks something to themselves, but Cloud overhears, “…and that attitude is why you’re here you little…,” as the human lets out a sigh. The human crouches down almost to Cloud’s level while scrunching up their smell-place a bit. “Your ‘Daddeh’ has to go visit his ‘Mummah’ a long ways away so he’s letting us take care of you until he gets back.”

Cloud gasps in shock, feeling the bump-bumps in his chest get stronger, " Daddeh idn’t hewe? Bu’ wha’ wiww Cwoud do if Cwoud needs nummies ow wawa ow if Cwoud makes bad-poopies? Daddeh awways cweans dah bad poopies," the stallion looks panickedly back towards the still steaming pool of poopies, “Cwoud doedn’t want ta smeww bad-poopies no mowe!”

The human sighs, “You can think of us as your temporary Daddies and Mommies, we’ll be taking care of you, but there will be rules while you’re here. Number one: you go by Forty-Four while you’re here, it helps your new Daddies remember which fluffy you are.” Cloud cocks his head to the side, confused at what the human was saying. The human continued on, “Number two: all ‘poopies and pee-pees’ have to go in the litterbox, if they don’t go in the litterbox you’ll have to clean them up yourselves.” At this Cloud gasps loudly and starts softly huu-huuing.

“Number three: and most importantly, you have to eat all the food we give you. If you don’t eat all the food… then a monster will get you!” This sends Cloud into hysterics, wailing and pounding on the soft floor with his marshmallow hooves while feeling tears start to make the fluff around his eyesies heavy.

“No! Cwoud hate it hewe, Cwoud hatechu! ‘Ou awen’t Cwoud’s Daddeh, Daddehs gib wub an’ ‘ou awe meanies an’ - an’ ‘ou awe stoopie, ‘ou a stoopie meanie!”, Cloud shrieks in-between choking gasps, trying to make breathies, while flailing his leggies wildly. “Daddeh! Daddeh sabe Cwoud! Not-Daddeh id scawie an’ Cwoud need weal Daddeh!” This continues for another minute or so until Cloud feels his leggies get so heavy he can’t move them anymore. Cloud looks up and around the room for his Daddy, and is shocked to see he isn’t there. The only human in the room is the black maned human making a meanie face at him.

This doesn’t make sense, anytime Cloud makes yellies his daddy picks him up, and pets him, and gives him sketti treats. Instead of soft pets and a full tummy Cloud has sore hooves, aches in his leggies, and a meanie human looming over him. The stupid Not-Daddy slowly stands and walks to a small door on the wall and opens it up. Catching his heavy breathies and wiping the tears from his see-places, Cloud stands up to see if maybe there are treats behind the door.

With a short shriek and some loud huu-huuing, Cloud scrambles to try and hide behind the red rubber ball. Behind the door is something Cloud has never seen himself, but knows instinctively. The monster Not-Daddy has a sorry stick in his not-hooves and is walking slowly towards Cloud. Thankfully, Cloud is hidden perfectly behind the rubber ball and the monster Not-Daddy won’t be able to find him! He’s such a smart flu-, his thoughts are cut off as Not-Daddy picks him up by the base of his tail, sending a shockwave of prickling pain through his tiny body.

“Since this is your first day here, I’m going to be nice and only give you five sorry stickings for each transgression.” Cloud doesn’t know what a ‘transgression’ is but he knows a good fluffy like him couldn’t have done anything to deserve this. The Not-Daddy draws his arm back, swinging the evil sorry stick towards Cloud.


Jimmy lets out a heavy sigh as he picks up a very simple aluminum sorry stick from a rack of five sorry sticks. These range from the one in his hands, to the one with small bumps meant to add an extra sting to each strike, and even one that looks like something right out of mad max. Jimmy silently wishes he could be using that one as he turns and faces the small feces spattered “saferoom”.

In reality the saferoom is more of a broom closet converted into a crude facsimile of what it attempts to be. This room is set aside for fluffies that show signs of going “smarty”. Jimmy isn’t positive the lump of cyan fluff pitifully trying to hide behind a rubber ball one third its size is going to turn out that way, but one bad apple can spoil the batch, so better safe than sorry.

Crouching down and gripping the fluffy by the base of the tail Jimmy lifts Forty-Four to eye level. The beyond pitiful look in the fluffy’s eyes and the fact it hadn’t tried to punch him, or worse, shit on him… yet makes Jimmy decide to show some mercy. “Since this is your first day here, I’m going to be nice and only give you five sorry stickings for each transgression,” and with that, Jimmy draws the sorry stick back and aims for the creature’s relatively thin stomach fluff.

The sounds and smells of farting fills the room as Forty-Four attempts to shit itself in response to the first strike, but thankfully the contents of its guts are already sitting on the floor. Jimmy makes another exaggerated swing and lightly taps the fluffy on the stomach. Even with this baby-like show of force, two thin strips of red and swollen skin are visible under the pitiful creature’s stomach fluff. It never ceases to amaze Jimmy just how fragile these things are.

Finishing out the next three soft strikes, he makes sure the fluffy is looking at him, before coldly but firmly stating, “Your name is not Cloud! Your name is Forty-Four!” Following up with five more swings to the rump, “Good fluffies do not demand things!” Looking the fluffy over Jimmy decides that the backs of his hind-legs are as good a place as any for the final strikes. Jimmy strikes four more times before a whiff of the slowly cooling feces on the floor hits his nose.

Deciding some measure of harsher punishment is warranted, he makes the final strike strong enough that it might make a small child wince. The fluffy however reacts as if salt has just been rubbed in his eyes, switching from loud huu-huu-ing to a sharp shrieking that stings Jimmy’s ears. He reaches out and shuts the fluffy’s mouth forcefully and roughly, muffling the offensive noise. With venom in his voice he speaks his final message, “Your new ‘Daddehs and Mummahs’ are not monsters, we’re all you have so you better get used to us,” mocking the fluffy by sing-songing the words ‘Daddehs and Mummahs’ and stretching out the phrase ‘all you have’ as long as possible.

With that finished, Jimmy roughly dunks Forty-Four onto the cushioned ground, eliciting a pained shriek as it lands on the wounds on its rear, and once again crouches down to its level. “Someone will be coming in to take care of your shi-… poopies,” barely catching himself before speaking an offending word. “Once your poopies have been cleaned up you’ll be fed, and after that it’s sleep time.” Standing up and ignoring the choked sobbing of the quivering mass on the floor, Jimmy quickly exits the room, breathing in the fresh air of the sterile environment outside the isolation room.


“Huu-huu… Cwoud has wowstest huwties, Daddeh nebah sowwy stick Cwoud. Meanie munstah Not-Daddeh id wowstest ebah. Wish poopie pwace stiww couwd go poopies so Cwoud couwd gib wowstest sowwy-poopies.” Cloud, or rather Forty-Four attempts to console himself by hugging his own tail and sobbing on the cushioned floor. Pulling his tail closer his face, attempting to mop up the heavy tears in his eyesie fluff, he feels the thin cut on the backs of his leggies stretch and tear slightly, sending glass like pain up his spine. Surely his Daddy will come save him from this awful place and give the monster Not-Daddy the worstest sorry hoofsies for sorry sticking Daddy’s only and bestest fluffy.

“Munstah Not-Daddeh wiww hab sowwies when Daddeh gets hewe!” Forty-Four defiantly announces to himself, when a brilliant idea, by fluffy standards at least, comes into his thinkie-place. “Cwoud id gunna teww Daddeh dat munstah Not-Daddeh gabe Cwoud sowwy-poopies, an’ - an’ den Daddeh wiww gib Not-Daddeh wowstest sowwy-hoofsies. Hee-hee, fwuffy am smawtest fwuffy ebah.” Feeling slightly better now with his master plan formed, Forty-Four begins playing with the rubber ball in the corner farthest away from his poopies, wincing as he sits on the slightly bloody track marks left by the sorry stick on his poopie-place. He sits, and plays, and waits for when his daddy will show up and punish the monster for his bestest and smartest fluffy.


Jimmy turns around after closing the door and notes down on the chart posted on the wall to the right of the door: “Subject indeed shows signs of possible smarty-ism, additional observation required.” He also puts down 15 tally marks in the sorry stick section. Finally, he checks off a large box, above which reads: “Cleared for experimentation.”

[Part 2]

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This title is a preview title so as not to spoil the next part, so the next part will have a different title.
This is my first full text-post ever throughout my 3 or so years of active fluffying. Please feel free to give any helpful suggestions to help improve my fluffspeak and flow of writing, hope you enjoy!

God I hope Cloud suffers a horrific fate. I can only hope it cures him of his budding smarty-ism enough to suffer the mental anguish of knowing he’s a bad fluffy. Always hate to see bad fluffies still stubbornly believing they’ve done nothing wrong to the bitter end. Great start to this story, I look forward to what you have in store.

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I think you meant “prologue” rather than epilogue.
Anyway, fun read. Wanna see Cloud get himself beaten over and over for being such a dumb fuck

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Very much true, tyvm for the catch! Yeah, seems as though Cloud didn’t face much consequences before his trip here…

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If what Cloud said is true, his owner is mostly the one to blame about his smarty syndrome development.
I also wonder how is he going to back up the bad poopies lie. Will he cake himself with his crap? Or he’ll assume his daddeh is so dumb he will buy it even if he looks clean enough for a fluffy?

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Went through and corrected 34 mistakes, hopefully should be a bit easier to read now!

A great start! Cloud seems like a brat, but maybe he can learn some humbleness. Can’t wait for the next part!

Thank you very much! More is defininetly coming but maybe a bit slower than I thought. Ran into some issues maintaining the story points so I’m writing out concrete backstories for characters before re-writing part two.

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Take your time! Writing is rough, even when writing about retarded horse pigs.

This is excellent! Love the little shit pathetically “hiding” behind the ball. Great stuff

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