First of all, I love the story, its great to have an ‘abuse’ story where the abuser is just a dopey clueless guy and the fluffies aren’t hell gremlins. But I feel like it shouldn’t quite be over yet?
Don’t get me wrong, I like the ending- but I feel like we’re prematurely declaring it a happy ending when there’s still a lot of issues to explore with Jimi and Mocha. What will happen when Sammy has to take more shifts because of short staffing? I feel like both of the fluffies would have PTSD from being left alone and that could trigger some discipline issues. And when they are at the clinic, what sort of things will they witness? Fluffies in pain, more terrible owners, the first time they have to do a critically needed amputation when Jimi is in the room? And is Mocha really fully recovered or, as often there are for both animals and humans, will she have a lifetime of chronic ear infections to care for? And what about her issues getting to the litterbox- how will that be fixed? The first time Mocha would need to be disciplined should be pretty interesting, especially as Sammy and Cheryl can’t possibly know everything that went on in Steve’s home.
Obviously this isn’t my story at all, I just think it would be interesting to more closely examine rehabilitation for moderately abused fluffies like Jimi and Mocha. There’s a lot of great potential for character examination. I just wanted to throw the idea I had out there for any future stories- or for other writers to pick up! Again, great story, its rare that I read anything that makes me want to see more of the characters involved.
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I’m not 100% sure if I’m done with this story either. I think if I continue it, then it would be something new, only because the focus is going to shift too much for what I was going for.
You are bringing up a lot of good points that I’m going to have to think about.
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Actually, this is giving me some ideas…
Damn you!
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Yeah this is a pretty based comment actually. Lots of good points brought up but I’m biased because I just want more story lol
Don’t worry, baby bird, imma feed you
Woo! Glad to hear it- I was afraid that it would be too ‘back seat writing’ of me to post it, but I couldn’t get it out of my head.
I’ll be honest too, I was thinking of when my family tried adopting a dog with a past history of abuse and despite trying, we still had to give the dog to a family without kids because the poor dog was just too easily triggered. My mom told us that sometimes love alone wasn’t enough to overcome trauma, and so I found out what PTSD was. So I tend to look sideways at people that assume just because the bad things stopped happening, that everything will be roses and spaghetti hereafter.
And since we haven’t seen enough of them yet, we could also use it to find out more about Sammy and Cheryl- like if Sammy’s desire to be a good owner is enough to overcome her pride at ‘getting one over’ on Cheryl if she needs more assistance with Mocha and Jimi.
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The interaction with the readers and the feedback really does help me shape the story. While I have hit the original plot points, the path to get there has changed drastically. If it wasn’t for input, Cheryl, and by extension Sammy, wouldn’t have been anything more than just a filler. So, I really do value the input and interaction, I feel it makes the story better.
I should have the next part done tomorrow.
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Personally, I would have named the little guy Rain, but that’s just me.
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God damn that is a good suggestion…
Maybe if he has any purple kids you can use it there.