Fair on all accounts. So this is part of a series, I need to learn how to link to previous parts lol, that will make it easier to read. But all the “time” titled ones on my galley are supposed to be for this story. For this one in particular the foals Orange, Purple and Red were all voted on by the community on what should happen to them. So they don’t show up again because their story is happening next, either this or next week. 
For the milk thing, those are their name plaques but I’m lazy and didn’t write on them like I should have lol
I was nervous about the ending being awkward but I have lots of other ideas and I wanted to post something. Perhaps there should be a sidquil for this one where shadow gets tortured but his fate is ultimately being pillowed and either sold or milked for seed.
And this is the part I regret the most… It’s supposed to be that this breeding place is emailing Happy Homes recovery farm. They were the ones who bid 4.5K on winning the sensitive baby. To win him from abusers. so its ironic tragedy that Shadow killed his baby to avoid abuse when he was going to a nice place. But I really dropped the ball there should have had two or three panels explaining it. ugh. oh well I’m mostly doing this to practice drawing so I’ll get better as time goes on.
Grammar has never been a strong suit so that’s just a fair criticism.
I really appreciate you asking questions it makes me so happy to read comment’s like this, Let me know other ways to improve and I’ll try my hardest
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The child was killed. I wouldn’t call that a win
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Not a win for the human though. I’d call it a Pyrrhic victory for fluffy
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That’s fair tbh
In my eyes, always a victory if a fluffy gets forever sleepies 
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I’ve got poo brain today so I can’t leave a more eloquent comment, just know this is a banger.
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If the owner really wanted to teach the stallion a lesson, he should have shown him the website for the farm and make him explain to the owners over video chat that he bit his foal’s head off.
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What a pleasure to have you post on my little story. That’s a great Idea do you mind if I steal it?
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I love a good brutal murder, especially one tainted with fucked up morality.
probably ended up traumatized
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What I’m wondering is why the guy didn’t explain where the foal was going. He never even tried to say “he won’t be hurt” or “he’s going to a safe place”. All he said was a super-ominous “he gets what he deserves >:)” and then threatening to beat up the dad for protecting a kid they already know he’s overprotective of, which is the absolute worst way to go about it.
A very fair criticism, I’ll find the right balance one day but my ponies are too smart and humans too dumb. I was trying to have him like to psychologically torcher them a bit. but I don’t think it really came across like that. 
Maybe it would be helpful to be like @FallenAngel007 and I’m sure others and draw other peoples stories. My flow is janky at best. Though cherry’s story is going well so far.
You can learn from reading others story or comics, thats how I know what to do on a story to be in torture or to be saved.
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WAS THAT THE THE BITE OF 87?!
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I wanna see him learn this.
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