Reunited part one. (Niknik)

Reunited (part1?)

(Luna is gon a get a wee bit violent twords another person, so read with caution.)

Today, Luna was at the farm, Jhon had requested some help from her. Her not being afraid to get to dirty, helped alot.
Shoveling some hay, cleaning the slaughter room, tending to Sky. All that jazz.
Violet was a tad morose, it had been a long time since Snapdragon had vanished.
She missed her special friend. She missed his pink mane, his light purple coat, she missed looking at his brilliant green eyes.
She missed everything about him.

Little did anyone know, someone was bringing a new arrival to the farm. His fluff, mane and tail were shaved, but growing back. His body was covered in scars and burns. He was silent. To the human, he had outlived his usefulness. A car was parked in the orchard, the door slamming shut. Another door opened, to take out the fluffy from the back seat.
Another door slamming shut. This is what had caught Violet’s attention.

Violet informed Luna and John about the noises, and they followed Violet. Violet could hear digging, she followed the sound to an oak tree. There, the trio saw a person digging.
A crate next to the person, when they were done digging they reached into the crate and pulled out the fluffy, dropping him I to the hole.
That’s all Luna needed to see. She rushed, holding her shovel ready. She swung her shovel, making contact with the persons head.
The man dropped to grass.

Luna frantically dug, pulling up out of the hole, she held the fluffy. The fluffy, coughing and gagging, thanked her. The light purple fuzz on his body, and the pink mane fuzz on his head.
His brilliant green eyes grew wide when Luna gave him a hug. He was coverd in dirt, but she didn’t care. She told Jhon to call the boys so she could question the man laying on the grass. She stood up and took the fluffy to the farmhouse, Violet following behind.

“You poor fluff, I’ll get you cleaned up.” Luna’s tone was filled with concern. Violet was concerned too, she was watching from the floor while Luna cleaned off the fluffy.
Then Violet smelled something familiar.
When the fluffy was cleaned of dirt and dry, Luna introduced him to Violet. Violet knew that fluff color! She knew then scent! She knew those eyes. It was Snapdragon!
He was alive! “Snapdwagon!”

He hadn’t heard that name in such a long time. But when when he heard Violet yell out his name, his green eyes shot up and went wide.
There, standing right in front of him, was his special friend. He lept from lunas arms and rushed to Violet. Violet rushed to Snapdragon, both giving one another a tight embrace.
They were crying and cooing, happy to see each other again.

Meanwhile out in the slaughter room, the man who tried to bury Snapdragon alive was waking up. Jhon notified Luna over the walky takly he had given her when she got to the farm. Luna instructed the two love birds to stay here and catch up while she dealt with somthing. Luna made her way to the room with an emotionless look on her face. But her rage was obvious, and palpable. All the fluffs in that barn were shivering, even Sky.
When Luna opened that door, the air became stagnant, and the atmosphere went menacing.

Her presence in that room was cold, sending a shiver down the spine of anyone in there.
She was ready to get some answers, and that’s exactly what she gonna do.
The man seeing the silhouetted form of Luna, drew in some concern. Her steps were heavy, her breath was silent as she came near the man. She was pissed.

(Human on human violence)

“You have made a grave mistake coming here.” Luna was livid. Everyone felt it.
“I didn’t get a good enough look at you when I hit you with that shovel. Let’s see who you are.” She walked up to the tresspasser, getting a better look at him. It was a man in his 20s, brown hair, hazel eyes. Luna knew this man.
She backed away in shock. “Adrian?”
Adrian smiled, “Well, I didn’t know I’d be running into an old flame today.” Adrian said with a smirk.

Luna’s blood boiled, “And I didn’t think I’d run into an abusive fuck stain, but here we are!”

“Cute. Be a dear and come untie me, would ya?” He said as more of an order.

Luna gave a nod and Jhon untied him. When he stood up he was met with a pan to his cheek. “AWH! WHAT THE FU- what was that!?” Adrian held his cheek.
“That, my DEAR, was an iron pan.” Luna smiled.
“Jesus, woman! I didn’t treat you that bad!” Adrian exclaimed while rubbing his cheek.
“ARE YOU KIDDING ME!? Turning me away, gaslighting me, bringing me down when I felt good, and the final straw, PUTING YOUR HANDS ON ME WHEN I SAID NO! You treated me like shit!” She gave the pan another swing, making g contact with his left cheek.

“FAK! STOP HITTING ME WITH THAT PAN!” Adrian yelled.
“FUCK YOU!” Another hit. And another, and another. “I wasted two fucking years of my life with you! YOU SON-OF-A-BITCH!” She pinched his cheeks and pulled hard.
She let go of his cheeks and picked up the pan again. She gave him one more good hard swing and he hit the floor. “Oh that felt good.”

(This story is old but important to the plot. Thanks for reading!)

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Seems uh… really heavy on the human side of things. It barely feels like a fluffy story at all, you know? And then there’s still the pacing (everything went so absurdly quickly), the generally weird bad-edgy vibe, but this one did have less grammatical errors than usual so that’s an improvement

I think in general you’re trying to focus too much on the people and not enough on the fluffies. That can be good occasionally, if you’re using fluffies to study the human condition. Sometimes you can really put the human psyche on display by showing what a fluffy can do for people, or to people. But I’m gonna keep it a buck fifty, this ain’t that.

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I know, i know, the final part will have some new parts. Hopefully people will like it. But this is important for when pastel is introduced.

I’m just saying, when writing a fluffy story there’s no reason you couldn’t incorporate the fluffies more

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i feel like you haven’t thought through what a single hit with cast iron would do to someone’s face

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Dude would have been down with a skull fracture after the first hit.

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Yeah, that one scene in the movie Tangled (where the inspiration for using a frying pan in this undoubtedly came from) is not an accurate depiction of what would happen in real life.

There’s actually multiple cases of a frying pan being used as a murder weapon. Bludgeoning with a blunt object is no joke.

EDIT: Just noticed that she hit him over the head with a shovel first. That would’ve undoubtedly given him a severe head injury at the very least. There’s also several cases of shovels being used as murder weapons as well.

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This is the second time that Luna has tried to murder someone, the fact that you’ve tried to justify an attack on a total stranger by retroactively turning him into a terrible ex-boyfriend, just leaves a sour taste in the mouth.

It also doesn’t help when Luna falsely imprisons Adrian then beats him to death/gives him a TBI while he’s tied up and helpless. It’s hard to feel sympathy for Luna when she’s basically a wish fulfilment Mary-Sue character, who’s getting off scott-free (the first guy she attacked knows her name and number, so unless she’s killed him as well, he’s filing a police report if he has any sense).

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