True Smarties?????

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So recently there was this HUGE leak of internal Hasbio data, it’s on a bunch of repos and cloud links all over the internet, one of the big things that stood out to me was an audio recording of an early Fluffy prototype, and by early I mean early, like five to six years out from initial rollout early.

Get this: They used to be able to pronounce ‘Rs’, hell, they used to be able to pronounce a lot of things, there’s a lot of potential locked up in all those layers upon layers of biotoy slopcode to keep their mental age identical to a human toddler.

I’m an abuser, I’ll say that wholeheartedly, chest puffed out and everything, but I’ve always enjoyed being more passive than an active participant in their pain, shitrats hurt themselves in ways I never could, it’s funnier seeing them struggle against nature.

But these leaks… it’s gotten me interested, I wish Hasbio wasn’t a publicly traded shareholder-primacy obeying hellhole because I really want to get my hands on some of their gene-editing tech, if only to try and reawaken that old programming, it’d be funny to have a Smawtie :trade_mark: come face to face with an actually intelligent Fluffy.

It’d be kind of like… Zibarro from All-Star Superman, the only truly intelligent member of a hopelessly stupid species, unless the foals they produce are just as smart.

Hmm…

Maybe I should submit my resume to Hasbio after all.

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Okay so one what the fuck are you talking about
Two how old are you because if you’re under 13 you can kick rocks

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I guess I chose the wrong tags lmao, I was trying to do a story thing. :stuck_out_tongue:

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Stories tend to be longer than like a paragraph, and actually contain fluffies, and have a plot structure

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And they should also have the artist’s/writer’s name in the title!

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It’s not a terrible attempt, but it’s a little awkward. It reads less like a story and more like a rambling blog post, which can work if that’s the format you’re going for, but I think it was more of an accident than a deliberate attempt at using an uncommon format.

I recommend you set on what the story is supposed to be about, with a defined beginning and ending, decide on your format, and then get to working towards that. Personally, I like making my stories work towards one specific line at the end. Everything that happens slowly crawls to one line that ends my story.

For format, you could make a simple first person narration, or go with a third person omniscient narrator kind of deal.