a male breeder has been annoyed over his prize Mirco stallion for breeding without his permission. As he was about to kill the shit; he was done with giving him chances. his newest mare whom he bought cheap as a young foal, was asking him for babies again. The problem is she wasn’t Alicorn train yet. that when an idea hit him
Minor criticism, the writing is a little hard to read, especially the blue on light backgrounds.
Other than that I’m intrigued to see where this goes, my theory is Lil Lothario is going to get kicked around a few times out of the mare’s fear before she slowly accepts him as a good babbeh. All the while he’s driven mad by thoughts of fucking the big mare like a simp playing Resident Evil Village for the first time.
What is that in his back on the last panel? It looks like a candle …?
I agree with BFM that the bright colors are hard to see, especially the human’s baby blue. I had to zoom in to read what was in the third panel at all. Maybe a darker outline could help with legibility?
Deserve should probably be written as desewbe, took me a second to not read it as deceive.
I wonder what the ending will be like. Probably the mummah trying hard not to kill an alicorn but then it, also failing to control its urges rapes a sibling foal and that causes the mare to stomp him to death. Then daddy pillows her for being a bad baby killer.
Really shouldnt give the little rapist a second chance. Well it appears he was already on his second chance, so third/twentieth chance?
Bubblegum has such a beautiful colour scheme! She deserves to have a nice baby to look after, this is so nice for her! Now all this horrid little stallion has to do is not fuck up.
It’s always a great idea to give the text a border, that helps a lot when reading. Also if you don’t wanna do speech bubbles you can " color code" the text with the colour of the fluffy speaking
heheheh paint i use the basic paint at come with all PCs for my art, tho I’m sure I could work some back outline for them. I’ll keep this in mind for next page